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          (you’re welcome 😀 )

          and don’t worry I’m not looking at this page, I just saw a comment directed at me while I was in modland 😛

      • (But like I’d much rather just fill this place up with “aaaaHHH”.)

        OKAY.

        NO MORE aaaaHHH. 🙁

        So I suck at planning. 😛 Maybe we should just start like chapter-by-chapter plots instead of one big plot? Like, we come up with ideas for the first few chapters, next few? They could probably be waaaay more detailed. AND THERE’D BE MORE ICY IN IT. (Or no? I don’t care. Either way. I just think it’d be quicker to get prolouge plot, chapter one plot, etc. rather than a brief whole thing. Because I’ve got something like, “for some reason Bumblestripe goes to Jingo’s group that’s cool right”. And PoVs and other boring stuff.)

        • ONE MORE AAAAAAH.

          AAAH.

          Okay. Okay. I’m all Sirius-like now 😉

          I suck at planning too 😛 I like that chapter-by-chapter idea, it might make things easier to plan each chapter out instead of ONE BIG PLOT 😛

          • AAAHHH.

            (I’m sorry I had tooooo 😛 )

            Anyway. Planning. Right.

            Uhh, I’m not sure what prolouge could be. Not a prophecy. Those are crazy overused. Maybe something with Jingo’s group. A PoV showing some battle/death there? What Sol’s gotten up to while he’s been away? (If we did Sol, he wouldn’t be appearing a lot. Because Sol appears enough as it is. 😛 )

            • Mm, I like that idea. Maybe there was a battle and a lot of cats died, leaving them weak. Meanwhile, another rogue group has moved in and is causing trouble for Jingo’s group, and if/when Bumblestripe finds Jingo’s group, he helps them develop a way to fight against the rogue group or something?

              I’m awful at plots 😛

  • Right.

    Sooo, I think I maaaaay need the Jingo part of the allegiances here. Sorry. 😛 When I C/Ped them I didn’t get around to pasting them and then I copied something else, forgetting.

  • RIGHT.

    THIS WON’T DIE WHILE I’M HERE.

    Is it saved? It’s fine if it’s not because it’s my fault anyway. 😛

    But anyway, prologue. Should it be in Jingo’s group or something? Do you have any other ideas?
    Right now I’m blank. 😛

    And who should write it?

    • WE’VE REVIVED IT OKAY

      OKAY.

      RIGHT SO

      Maybe in Jingo’s group, maybe there’s been a battle with the other group (If we do that idea) and they’re mourning their lost groupmates and such?

      I don’t know, up to you 🙂

      • . . . Three day late reply. Oops. 😛

        Alright, I guess I can write the prologue? It should be done pretty soon and then we can talk about it/edit or possibly change it all up. 😛

  • Annnd about two weeks later it’s still not here. Oops. 😛

    This is my final day of internet until about July 5, and it’s on my dead laptop, so I guess I’ll just add more until then and post it?

    Or I might be able to put it here tomorrow morning. Also, title ideas? 😛

    • Okay 😛

      I haven’t thought of titles, really. Some ideas below.

      What Lies Beyond

      Choose Wisely

      A Magical Wonderful Fabulous Fanfiction by Mist and Icy 😛

      Those were off the top of my head 😛

      • 😛

        Out of those, I’d say I like What Lies Beyond best. Right now I have no ideas, but I guess I’ll try and think of some.

  • Ookay. This isn’t good, and it’s very rushed and the style changes awfully. Not to mention it’s extreeeeemely short. 😛 sorry if it’s bad formatting.

    Jet couldn’t move.
    Figuratively, out of shock, and quite literally.

    Cats were everywhere, fighting. In Jingo’s camp. Which explained the shock, seeing as the other cats had just strolled in and started attacking. Very casually. Also interrupting Jet’s midday meal.
    As for the literally, Jet couldn’t move because he was currently pinned down to the mossy grass by a massive, burly she-cat. In his opinion, it was actually quite unusual. As far as he knew, she-cats generally weren’t built like this one. Of course, this train of thought was distractingJet from the reality of the she-cat. And the fact he should probably be fighting back.
    Realising that, Jet slid his claws out of his sheathes, wriggling his left front paw experimentally. It appeared to be the only paw movable, so he swiped at the she-cat’s underbelly, aiming at a particularly odd black splotch.
    The she-cat screeched, and Jet smiled up at her sweetly.
    Then the fight got real, because Jet began to focus.

    Springing up with a small grunt, the black tom scanned the she-cat for weak spots, who was already in her fighting stance, teeth bared. Waiting for Jet to make the first move.
    And he did. Rearing up on his hindpaws, he leapt towards her, raking his claws along her flank. The tortoiseshell let out a yelp, but wasted no time in retaliating with a blow to Jet’s cheek.
    Pain seared through the spot, urging Jet on.
    Summoning all his courage, Jet clamped his teeth down on the cat’s shoulder and clawed her back. His opponent returned the strikes, and soon the two were all-out fighting.
    But soon another cat came to aid the tortoiseshell. This time, a light tabby.
    Jet blinked, in horror and admiration at the cats’ preparation skills. After all, they were only a group of loners.
    However, he soon noticed that he was in no condition whatsoever to fight the second cat, as well as the first.
    So, pelt ragged and scarlet, Jet aimed a few swipes, weak and flimsy. The cats’ counterattacks were by far stronger, though.
    Jet gave up. He couldn’t do it. The fight was too much.
    He let every limb go limp, accepting every strike with a wince. Then he sprawled over, faking dead.
    Pepper would’ve been ashamed if he’d been alive, which was why, for the first time, Jet was glad he wasn’t.
    He hardly glanced up as the two cats padded away triumphantly to find another opponent.

    Soon, the fierce group they’d been fighting left. Just left. Because it was clear they’d won the fight. Again, just like last time.
    Jet struggled feebly to his paws, staggering over to where the others stood. Jingo was atop a rock, looking at her cats. No emotion was revealed in her gaze.
    “Cats. . . ,” She began, sweeping her gaze over Jet. “They did it again.”
    Jet twitched his ear. It sounded very undiplomatic, considering she was their leader, in his opinion. But it was true.
    And they’d probably do it again in a heartbeat.
    “Many died,” Jingo meowed. “Hussar. . . Merry. . . Pod.”
    Silence followed her words. Jet’s heart ached with sorrow as he remembered the cats. But then he stiffened.
    “I don’t know what to do anymore.” Jingo finished.
    More silence.
    Shock.
    Desperation.
    Their own leader had given up.
    “Jingo,” Fritz meowed softly. “Maybe we should leave. This group. . . they’re plain vicious, though they’re only former kittypets.”
    Jet felt his hackles rise, ready to lash out with an argument. Fritz was wrong. Utterly wrong. They couldn’t leave.
    “No!” Speckle stood from the back, slashes criss-crossing her pelt. “I won’t leave.”
    Jingo shot a look of interest at her, before meowing, “We won’t leave. For now. But mark my words, if one more cats dies, I’m done. Begin grieving.”
    The cats began to make their way to the bodies, all bruised.

    I think I probably need to add more, dunno. Maybe we should just get a different prologue idea and then rewrite.

    • I think it’s great 🙂 Is it bad I laughed at the “They interrupted Jet’s midday meal” part? 😛

  • The slightly revised version. All revisions are in bold, and there are now italics. I also fixed a bit of the formatting.

    Jet couldn’t move.
    Figuratively, out of shock, and quite literally.

    Cats were everywhere, fighting. In Jingo’s camp. Which explained the shock, seeing as the other cats had just strolled in and started attacking. Very casually. Also interrupting Jet’s midday meal.
    As for the literally, Jet couldn’t move because he was currently pinned down to the mossy grass by a massive, burly she-cat. In his opinion, it was actually quite unusual. As far as he knew, she-cats generally weren’t built like this one. Of course, this train of thought was distractingJet from the reality of the she-cat. And the fact he should probably be fighting back.

    Realising that, Jet slid his claws out of his sheathes, wriggling his left front paw experimentally. It appeared to be the only paw movable, so he swiped at the she-cat’s underbelly, aiming at a particularly odd black splotch.
    The she-cat screeched, and Jet smiled up at her sweetly.
    Then the fight got real, because Jet began to focus.

    Springing up with a small grunt, the black tom scanned the she-cat for weak spots, who was already in her fighting stance, teeth bared. Waiting for Jet to make the first move.

    And he did. Rearing up on his hindpaws, he leapt towards her, raking his claws along her flank. The tortoiseshell let out a yelp, but wasted no time in retaliating with a blow to Jet’s cheek.
    Pain seared through the spot, urging Jet on.
    Summoning all his courage, Jet clamped his teeth down on the cat’s shoulder and clawed her back. His opponent returned the strikes, and soon the two were all-out fighting.

    But soon another cat came to aid the tortoiseshell. This time, a light tabby.
    Jet blinked, in horror and admiration at the cats’ preparation skills. After all, they were only a group of loners.
    However, he soon noticed that he was in no condition whatsoever to fight the second cat, as well as the first.
    So, pelt ragged and scarlet, Jet aimed a few swipes, weak and flimsy. The cats’ counterattacks
    were by far stronger, though.
    Jet felt his body freeze over in pain as he feebly swiped. And then, the black tom did it.

    Jet gave up. He couldn’t do it.
    He couldn’t fight two cats in this condition.
    With a final glare of icy hatred, he let every limb go limp, accepting each strike with a wince. Then he sprawled over, faking dead.
    Pepper would’ve been ashamed if he’d been alive, which was why, for the first time, Jet was glad he wasn’t.

    He hardly glanced up as the two cats padded away triumphantly to find another opponent. They didn’t look back once to make sure it hadn’t been a dishonest trick, luckily.

    Soon, the fierce group they’d been fighting left. Just left. Because it was clear it was they who’d won the fight. Again, just like last time. And probably next time.

    Jet struggled feebly to his paws, staggering over to where the others stood. Jingo was atop a rock, looking at her cats. No emotion was revealed in her gaze, but it made Jet shiver. Just like the thought of the other cats’ did.
    “Cats. . . ,” She began, sweeping her gaze over Jet. He tried to decode what was in her eyes, but he couldn’t. “They did it again.”
    Jet twitched his ear. It sounded very undiplomatic, considering she was their leader, in his opinion. But it was true.

    And they’d probably do it again in a heartbeat.

    “Many died,” Jingo meowed. “Hussar. . . Merry. . . Pod.”
    Silence followed her words. Jet’s heart ached with sorrow as he remembered the cats. Especially Hussar. Hussar, the cat he’d had a special bond with.
    The cat he might have even. . . loved.

    “I don’t know what to do anymore.” Jingo finished abruptly.
    More silence.
    Shock.
    Desperation.
    Their own leader had given up.

    “Jingo,” Fritz meowed softly. “Maybe we should leave. This group. . . they’re plain vicious, though they’re only former kittypets.”

    Jet tilted his head, contemplating what the tom had just said. It certainly made sense.

    “No!” Speckle stood from the back, slashes criss-crossing her pelt. “I won’t leave.”

    Jingo shot a look of interest at her, before meowing, “We won’t leave. For now. But mark my words, if one more cats dies, I’m done. Begin grieving.”

    The cats began to make their way to the bodies, all bruised.

  • Jingo’s Group

    LEADER
    Jingo – Dark brown tabby she-cat with the tip of her tail missing.

    ASSISTANT LEADERS

    Copper – Pale ginger tom with darker tabby stripes.

    Shade – Dark grey she-cat with amber eyes.

    LEADER’S GUARD

    Ani – Very pale grey she-cat with white-tipped fur and light green eyes.

    GUARDS

    Jet – Black tom

    Flame – Lithe ginger she-cat with amber eyes
    Trainee – Cypress

    Speckle – Brown she-cat with darker flecks.

    HUNTERS

    Mist – Graceful silver tabby she-cat with amber eyes.

    Frisk – Black-and-white tom.

    Ember – Pale ginger tom with blue eyes.
    Trainee- Thistle

    CARE-TAKERS

    Stream – Light grey she-cat with yellow eyes. (Guard)
    Kits – Berry, Flower

    Amber – Sleek black-and-ginger she-cat with bright amber eyes and a long tail. (Hunter)
    Kits – Expecting Frisk’s kits

    TRAINEES

    Cypress – Pale brown she-cat with blue eyes. (Training to be a Guard)

    Thistle – Grey-and-white tom. (Training to be a Hunter)

    RETIRED CATS

    Spike – Splotchy grey tom with spiky fur and blue eyes. (Former Assistant Leader)

    Oak – Brown tabby tom with a thick tail. (Former Hunter)

    Right. Here’s the allegiances, sorry for the wait. 🙂

    • Thanks. 🙂

      Right. Titles. Unless you’ve thought, or can think of anymore, I think we should either use one of the ones up there you suggested (preferably the third 😛 ) or try and come up with some mysterious one word title. They’re easiest to think of and we don’t need to know what it means until the end. 😛

      I’m still trying to think of some, though.

    • HOLD UP

      I just looked at that closely. I absolutely refuse this “Mist” as a prey-hunter. Unless there’s an Ice. Or she dies soon. Or you prove it’s someone else. Thank you for considering what i just said. 🙂

  • Okay, I guess we have to get to editing?

    (Allow me to insert a thing Kate told me in an email. 😛 ) “Can you check it for spelling, grammar and consistency please (make sure there are no name muddles 🙂 and that the story flows logically).”

    Anyway, you can add stuff or remove stuff, change names. It’s up to you. ^^

    • Whisper

      Night Wisher

      Please don’t ask the meanings. I haven’t got that figured out. 😛 Also, I think What Lies Beyond is still pretty good. ^^

      One more thing. Maybe we should figure out the PoVs? We’ve got Bumblestripe, but we’re probably gonna need somebody in Jingo’s group. And maybe another Clan cat for when Bumblestripe leaves.

      • I love Whisper 🙂

        Yeah, maybe Jet or Frisk for Jingo’s group? Maybe a background character in ThunderClan that doesn’t get much time in the spotlight? 😛

  • So Frisk for Jingo’s group PoV?

    And – even though I don’t like her 😛 – maybe Millie? You could see how she felt about her son going missing, etc. I also thought about Dovewing. Thoughts?

  • Jet couldn’t move.
    Figuratively, out of shock, and quite literally.

    Cats were everywhere, fighting. In Jingo’s camp. Which explained the shock, seeing as the other cats had just strolled in and started attacking. Very casually. Also interrupting Jet’s midday meal.
    As for the literally, Jet couldn’t move because he was currently pinned down to the mossy grass by a massive, burly she-cat. In his opinion, it was actually quite unusual. As far as he knew, she-cats generally weren’t built like this one. Of course, this train of thought was distracting Jet from the reality of the she-cat. And the fact he should probably be fighting back.

    Realising that, Jet slid his claws out of his sheathes, wriggling his left front paw experimentally. It appeared to be the only paw movable, so he swiped at the she-cat’s underbelly, aiming at a particularly odd black splotch.
    The she-cat screeched, and Jet smiled up at her sweetly.
    Then the fight got real, because Jet began to focus.

    Springing up with a small grunt, the black tom scanned the she-cat for weak spots, who was already in her fighting stance, teeth bared. Waiting for Jet to make the first move.

    And he did. Rearing up on his hindpaws, he leapt towards her, raking his claws along her flank. The tortoiseshell let out a yelp, but wasted no time in retaliating with a blow to Jet’s cheek.
    Pain seared through the spot, urging Jet on.
    Summoning all his courage, Jet clamped his teeth down on the cat’s shoulder and clawed her back. His opponent returned the strikes, and soon the two were all-out fighting.

    But soon another cat came to aid the tortoiseshell. This time, a light tabby.
    Jet blinked, in horror and admiration at the cats’ preparation skills. After all, they were only a group of loners.
    However, he soon noticed that he was in no condition whatsoever to fight the second cat, as well as the first.
    So, pelt ragged and scarlet, Jet aimed a few swipes, weak and flimsy. The cats’ counterattacks
    were by far stronger, though.
    Jet felt his body freeze over in pain as he feebly swiped. And then, the black tom did it.

    Jet gave up. He couldn’t do it.
    He couldn’t fight two cats in this condition.
    With a final glare of icy hatred, he let every limb go limp, accepting each strike with a wince. Then he sprawled over, faking dead.
    Pepper would’ve been ashamed if he’d been alive, which was why, for the first time, Jet was glad he wasn’t.

    He hardly glanced up as the two cats padded away triumphantly to find another opponent. They didn’t look back once to make sure it hadn’t been a dishonest trick, luckily.

    Soon, the fierce group they’d been fighting left. Just left. Because it was clear it was they who’d won the fight. Again, just like last time. And probably next time.

    Jet struggled feebly to his paws, staggering over to where the others stood. Jingo was atop a rock, looking at her cats. No emotion was revealed in her gaze, but it made Jet shiver. Just like the thought of the other cats’ did.
    “Cats. . . ” She began, sweeping her gaze over Jet. He tried to decode what was in her eyes, but he couldn’t. “They did it again.”
    Jet twitched his ear. It sounded very undiplomatic, considering she was their leader, in his opinion. But it was true.

    And they’d probably do it again in a heartbeat.

    “Many died,” Jingo meowed. “Hussar. . . Merry. . . Pod.”
    Silence followed her words. Jet’s heart ached with sorrow as he remembered the cats. Especially Hussar. Hussar, the cat he’d had a special bond with.
    The cat he might have even. . . loved.

    “I don’t know what to do anymore.” Jingo finished abruptly.
    More silence.
    Shock.
    Desperation.
    Their own leader had given up.

    “Jingo,” Fritz meowed softly. “Maybe we should leave. This group. . . they’re plain vicious, though they’re only former kittypets.”

    Jet tilted his head, contemplating what the tom had just said. It certainly made sense.

    “No!” Speckle stood from the back, slashes criss-crossing her pelt. “I won’t leave.”

    Jingo shot a look of interest at her, before meowing, “We won’t leave. For now. But mark my words, if one more cats dies, I’m done. Begin grieving.”

    The cats began to make their way to the bodies, all bruised and battered. They crouched over the fallen bodies of their friends and kin, some letting out soft cries of grief. Jet crept over to Hussar’s still body and buried his muzzle in his friend’s soft fur.

    So, what do you think? Sorry for taking so long 😛

  • So, titles. I officially suck at coming up with these, and unless you want a mysterious one word title I think we should use a previous one we had. 😛 (And maybe tweak it a little? I don’t know.)

      • My favourite’s What Lies Beyond, what do you think?

        Also, since our chapter’s a little short, do you want to say it’s a bunch of short chapters? (I’m ready for posting whenever we’ve got a title)